When I read yours, I could tell how much time and thought was put into it. I can’t label how I know that but there’s a “sense/feeling” that it was written in relation to someone you thought of—and then that final line was truly a zinger—it just nailed it.

I won’t lie—the beginning of Chatty’s shocked me how good it sounds….it let me know I could well be fooled by writers who are using it.
However the ending felt—rushed—like it needed a bow and it just sent me the gift in a bag. And I was left—hanging—

So you won!

But damnit—I’m still pissed how well it did. The fact you took out the rhyming btw—made it better—
Had you left it—

It was a Shereen slam dunk.

Loved this post…I learned a lot about poetry! ☺️ thank YOU!!